self introduction

2022-06-22 · 첨삭 강사 Maine

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hi my name is robin and im 27 years old now. I was born in suji-gu and surprisingly I live in suji for 27 years. by the way I am currently majoring global trade and i will graduate my university next month, as you know my graduation is very late than other same age friends. its because I prepared CPLA test for 2 years. you know CPLA test is lawyer test which is specialized in labor law. umm.. I know that labor law and my major is quite different but at 2020 I really wanna be a labor lawyer. so I study really hard for that test. for example I love to meet friends and drink some soju with them. but during the test season I didn\'t meet friend at all, plus I study 12,13 hours every day with no holiday. unfortunately I failed the test but I did my best so I have no regrets. after failure I aim to be a part of a company which works on human resource. in order to get a job I still study about labor law and opic test. I really wanna get IH LEVEL and I believe that I can get a great job.

강사 첨삭

Hello Robin!
Thank you for doing your homework. Check your capitalization when writing. Please read the corrections and practice making sentences using the given patterns. You can still do better! ^^

~T. Maine

hi my name is robin and im 27 years old now.
>>Hi, my name is Robin and I\'m 27 years old.
I was born in suji-gu and surprisingly I live in suji for 27 years.
>>I was born in Suji-gu and surprisingly, I live in here for 27 years.
by the way I am currently majoring global trade and i will graduate my university next month, as you know my graduation is very late than other same age friends.
>>By the way, I am currently majoring in global trade and I will graduate from my university next month. As you know my graduation is later than my batchmates and friends.
its because I prepared CPLA test for 2 years.
>> It\'s because I prepared for CPLA test for 2 years.
you know CPLA test is lawyer test which is specialized in labor law.
>> You know CPLA test is a test for lawyers which is specialized in labor law.
umm.. I know that labor law and my major is quite different but at 2020 I really wanna be a labor lawyer.
>>I know that the labor law and my major are quite different, but in 2020 I really wanna be a lawyer.
so I study really hard for that test.
>> So I studied really hard for the test.
for example I love to meet friends and drink some soju with them.
>> I love to meet my friends and drink some soju with them.
but during the test season I didn\'t meet friend at all, plus I study 12,13 hours every day with no holiday.
>>But during the test season, I didn\'t meet my friends at all. In addition, I studied for 12 to 13 hours every day without a rest day.
unfortunately I failed the test but I did my best so I have no regrets.
>> Unfortunately, I failed the test although I did my best so I don\'t have any regret.
after failure I aim to be a part of a company which works on human resource.
>>After my failure, I aim to be a part of a company which works in human resources.
in order to get a job I still study about labor law and opic test.
>>In order to get a job, I still study about labor law and OPIC.
I really wanna get IH LEVEL and I believe that I can get a great job.
>> I really want to get IH and I believe that I can get a great job in the future.

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