Self Introduction
학생이 쓴 원문
Self Introduction
HI, My name is [Name]-A Park and my English name is Julia.
I have lived in Hwa seong since 2014 and my family are 4.
One daughter and son go to university and my husband is a battery engineer.
I am currently working in a global company and working for 20 years.
I am in charge of personal management
I\\\'m a very outgoing person.
I like to meet people so I have several kind of meetings.
because I can share my thoughts, activities, and moods with them.
My favorite pastime is hiking
the reasone is that I can feel good and keep good health when I hike.
I am trying to hike 100 famous mountain in Korea.
My life motto is \\\"No pain, no gain.\\\"
Anyway, I guess that\\\'s all.
I appreciate your listening.
강사 첨삭
Good day. Julia
Thank you for writing your homework how to introduce your self. Please practice those sentences and we\'re going to the actviity again on Wednesday.
Have a great day!
Aki~
Hi, My name is [Name]-A Park and my English name is Julia.
>>> Correct!
Or >>> Hi, My name is [Name]-A Park and you can call me Julia.
I have lived in Hwa Seong since 2014 and my family are 4.
>>> I have lived in Hwaseong since 2014 with my family,
One daughter and son go to university and my husband is a battery engineer.
>>> There are four (4) members in my family, My husband who is a battery engineer, me, my daughter, and my son who are now both in the university.
I am currently working in a global company and working for 20 years.
>>> Correct!
or >>> I have been working for twenty years in a global company.
I am in charge of personal management
>>> Correct!
I\'m a very outgoing person.
>>> Correct!
I like to meet people so I have several kinds of meetings because I can share my thoughts, activities, and moods with them.
>>> I like to meet people so I have several kinds of meetings where I can share my thoughts, activities, and moods with them.
My favorite pastime is hiking
>>> Correct!
Or >>> Hiking i my favorite past time.
the reason is that I can feel good and keep good health when I hike.
>>> because I feel good and I can keep my good health when I hike.
I am trying to hike 100 famous mountains in Korea.
>>> Correct!
My life motto is \"No pain, no gain.\"
>>> Correct!
Anyway, I guess that\'s all.
>>> Correct!
I appreciate your listening.
>>> Correct!
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