self-introduction

2015-01-29 · 첨삭 강사 Marie

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Hello, Teacher Marie. I don't have enough time to do my homework because I have a meeting in Research Institute today. So I remained my self-introduction that was written lately. It's about my decision to do a Ph.D in Korea University. Before starting the master’s course in the spring of 2013, I had a gap of ten years. In those days I had worked in the Marketing Department of [Company]. Despite my passion and expectations about studying, I didn’t have enough financial support when I graduated from university. Instead enrolling in graduate school, I choose to be an office worker. It was a very difficult decision since I had studied to pass an entrance exam for a long time and actually received a letter of acceptance from Korea university graduate school. Eventually, I am here even though it took time to return.

강사 첨삭

Hi Kaylee! Thank you for sending this in. I didn\'t know you used to work for LG Electronics. I thought you just went to study at your graduate school right after college. I admire your patience and dedication. Not many people would go back to pursue their goals once they already got used to their jobs. I\'m one of those people. Haha! It goes to show that you really want to achieve your goals and reach your dreams. Good luck! Please review my corrections below. Ciao! ~Teacher Marie~ Hello, Teacher Marie. >> CORRECT! I don\'t have enough time to do my homework because I have a meeting in the Research Institute today. >> CORRECT! So I remained my self-introduction that was written lately.>> So I sent in a self-introduction that I wrote recently. It\'s about my decision to do a Ph.D in Korea University. >> CORRECT! Before starting the master’s course in the spring of 2013, I had a gap of ten years.>> Before starting my master\'s degree in the spring of 2013, there was a ten-year gap.In those days I had worked in the Marketing Department of [Company].>> CORRECT! >> In those days = During that period/timeDespite my passion and expectations about studying, I didn’t have enough financial support when I graduated from university.>> CORRECT! Instead enrolling in graduate school, I choose to be an office worker.>> Instead of enrolling in graduate school, I chose to be an office worker. It was a very difficult decision since I had studied to pass an entrance exam for a long time, and I actually received a letter of acceptance from Korea university graduate school.>> CORRECT! Eventually, I am here even though it took time to return. >> Eventually, I got back here even though it took some time for me to return.  

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