Self introduction for interview

2019-06-18 · 첨삭 강사 Lucy

학생이 쓴 원문

Hello, I\'m minseop yeo, an applicant for E-tech engineering and construction, who approaches people and disarms them. With this ability, when freshmen felt a little awkward because they were first met, I used to change awkward mood into good atmosphere by joking. In every business, good atmosphere helps team collaboration. And Team collaboration makes better team performance. Based on this ability, I will be a talented person who creates bright atmosphere after joining E-Tech engineering and construction. And I want to disarm you and make a good interview.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]! :)


Wow, it\'s good to hear from you. I wish to have wonderful and fun conversations with you later. I can\'t to hear your jokes either. :) See you!


warm regards,

Teacher Lucy



Hello, I\'m Min Seop Yeo, an applicant for E-tech engineering and construction, who approaches people and disarms them.

>>CORRECT!

>>Hello, I\'m Min Seop Yeo, an applicant for E-tech engineering and construction. I approach people and disarm their guard.


With this ability, when freshmen felt a little awkward because they were first met, I used to change awkward mood into good atmosphere by joking.

>>With this ability, when freshmen felt a little awkward because they first met, I used to change awkward mood into good atmosphere by joking.


In every business, good atmosphere helps team collaboration.

>>In every business, good atmosphere helps team in collaborating.

>>In every business, good atmosphere helps team to collaborate.


And Team collaboration makes better team performance.

>>CORRECT!


Based on this ability, I will be a talented person who creates bright atmosphere after joining E-Tech engineering and construction.

>>CORRECT!

>>Based on my abilities,I believe I\'ll be a talented person who creates bright atmosphere after joining E-Tech engineering and construction.


And I want to disarm you and make a good interview.

>>CORRECT!

>>I want to showcase and possess a positive interview.


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