self introduction, reason of application

2021-11-18 · 첨삭 강사 Fiona

학생이 쓴 원문

Thank you Fiona!

강사 첨삭

Hi Mi [이름]! 
That was fast :) 
Enjoy everything you do in life. You will do a great job in your company! 
Fighting! 

self introduction

Hello This is [Name] [이름] [이름].

>>> Hello, I\'m [이름].

I applied since I want to be a process development expert.

>>> I applied because I wanted to become a process development expert.

I have developed professionalism in my field of study.

>>> I have developed my expertise in my field.

I majored in pharmaceutical engineering.

>>> CORRECT!

I took lots of courses on medicine and get 4.23.

>>> I took many lectures on medicine and received 4.23.

I earned a Engineer Chemical Analysis and Chemical Engineer.

>>> I earned Engineering in Chemical Analysis and Chemical Engineering.

Also, I built up verification experiene.

>>> Also, I gained verification experience.

While doing practice test analysis, I learned physico-chemical and microbial test.

>>> I learned physical chemistry and microbial testing while doing practice test analysis.

Plus I won bronze prize at the chemical engineering competition.

>>> And I won a bronze prize at a chemical engineering competition.

Therefore I will carry out my duties at Samsung Biologics with the expertise and sense of purpose.

>>> Therefore, I will work at Samsung Biologics with a sense of expertise and purpose.

 

reason of application

I majored in pharmaceutical engineering.

>>> CORRECT!

I felt an interest in pharmaceuticals and GMP while taking classes such as ‘Quality Control of Pharmaceutical Manufacturing’, ‘Pharmaceutical Analysis and Experiment’, and ‘Equipment Analysis and Experiment’.

>>> CORRECT!

Samsung Biologics is a competitive company with CDO\'s S-Celerate and the 4th plant of 256,000L.(two hundred fifty six thousand)

>>> CORRECT!

I applied since I want to analyze various chemical substances and perform process development tasks.

>>> CORRECT!

I earned a Engineer Chemical Analysis and Chemical Engineer to develop my expertise.

>>> I have acquired a chemical analysis engineer and a chemical engineer to develop my expertise.

I want to enrich life of man with my capability and Samsung Biologics\'s skills.

>>> I want to enrich human life with my skills and Samsung Biologics\' skills.

 


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