(Self-introduction) Tell me something about yourself.
학생이 쓴 원문
From a young age, diverse events in the global financial market interested me, so I decided to study international finance at Waseda University. After graduation, I started career in the Customer Service team at Dow Jones, where I was awarded four times with stellar customer service. Positive customer experience led to an increase in the subscription sale, which again led to considerable customer base growth. Currently, I am working as a Data Services Analyst at Willis Towers Watson and analyzing clients\' data using statistical software to provide advice to clients on their market practices. Bloomberg provides a platform that plays an intermediary role between technology and clients within the global financial market. Alongside this, as part of the analytics team, I would be a user-friendly communicator by interpreting economic data to clients. Therefore, with technology and client dealing experience backed by finance knowledge,I believe this position is where I could contribute 100%.
강사 첨삭
Thank you once again for this Aciel.
From a young age, diverse events in the global financial market interested me, so I decided to study international finance at Waseda University.
>>> OR: From a young age, diverse events in the global financial market have interested me, so I decided to study international finance at Waseda University.
After graduation, I started career in the Customer Service team at Dow Jones, where I was awarded four times with stellar customer service.
>>> OR: After graduation, I started a career in the Customer Service team at Dow Jones, where I was awarded four times with stellar customer service.
Positive customer experience led to an increase in the subscription sale, which again led to considerable customer base growth.
>>> correct
Currently, I am working as a Data Services Analyst at Willis Towers Watson and analyzing clients\' data using statistical software to provide advice to clients on their market practices.
>>> correct
Bloomberg provides a platform that plays an intermediary role between technology and clients within the global financial market.
>>> correct
Alongside this, as part of the analytics team, I would be a user-friendly communicator by interpreting economic data to clients.
>>> correct
Therefore, with technology and client dealing experience backed by finance knowledge, I believe this position is where I could contribute 100%.
>>> OR: Therefore, with technology and client dealing experience backed by finance knowledge, I believe this position is where I could contribute a 100 percent.
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