self intruction 2

2013-10-01 · 첨삭 강사 Leah

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Lastly, I’m good at communicating with other people. Latinmusic performance circul, volunteer at water saving campaign, student diplomat corporation, ect Based on these experiences and my qualifications, I am sure that I will be able to contribute to your company. for example, bringing up close relationship with related deparments such as R&D, laboratory and clinical trials and then doing my best to complete in such a way that I don’t miss any article and requirement from ICH, CTD. In doing so, I believe that I can be a solid RA specialist in Latinamerica. I posses friendly and outgoing nature and this helps me a lot mingle well with people even with who I meet at first time. Because of these characteristics, I actively participated in various extracurricular activities during my college years. From these experiences I could improve my interpersonal and communication skills which allow me to make good relationship with other people.

강사 첨삭

There you go, I am done checking the second part^^

It was really an impressive and promising self-introduction.

Good job^^

TEACHER LEAH

 

Lastly, I’m good at communicating with other people.

>>Correct

Latinmusic performance circul, volunteer at water saving campaign, student diplomat corporation, ect

>>I joined a Latin music performing group, volunteered in water saving campaigns, joined a student diplomat corporation and many more.
Based on these experiences and my qualifications, I am sure that I will be able to contribute to
your company.

>> Correct
for example, bringing up close relationship with related deparments such as R&D, laboratory and clinical trials and then doing my best to complete in such a way that I don’t miss any article and requirement from ICH, CTD.

>>For example, bringing up close relationship with related departments such as R&D, laboratory and clinical trials and then doing my best to complete in such a way that I don’t miss any article and requirement from ICH, CTD.
In doing so, I believe that I can be a solid RA specialist in Latinamerica.

>> In doing so, I believe that I can be a solid RA specialist in Latin America.
I posses friendly and outgoing nature and this helps me a lot mingle well with people even with who I meet at first time.

>>I posses a friendly and outgoing nature and this can help me a lot to mingle well with people even with people I meet for the first time.

Because of these characteristics, I actively participated in various extracurricular activities during my college years.
>>Correct
From these experiences I could improve my interpersonal and communication skills which allow me to make good relationship with other people.

>>Correct

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