Sensibility
학생이 쓴 원문
For many people, what kind of phone you have shows what you pursue beyond its function. Those who value practicality choose a phone with a good quality and function. Those who are tech savvy prefer a phone with new functions and advanced AI. However, some young people who are sensitive to design or brand image buy fancy iPhones. They value some kind of sensibility. That\'s why young women in their 20s own iPhones. But nowadays the situation becomes changing because of the trend of Young Forty.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Gi [이름]!
When I read your last statement, I immediately remembered HaHa from Running Man. They tease him as “Young Forty” because he bought the latest iPhone model, even though in Korea iPhones are usually associated with the younger generation. I agree that people have different preferences, but for me, functionality and quality are the top priorities.
- T. Caitlyn
For many people, what kind of phone you have shows what you pursue beyond its function.
>> CORRECT
Those who value practicality choose a phone with a good quality and function.
>> Those who value practicality choose a phone with good quality and functionality.
Those who are tech savvy prefer a phone with new functions and advanced AI.
>> Those who are tech-savvy prefer phones with new features and advanced AI.
However, some young people who are sensitive to design or brand image buy fancy iPhones.
>> CORRECT
They value some kind of sensibility.
>> They value a certain kind of sensibility.
That\'s why young women in their 20s own iPhones.
>> That’s why many young women in their 20s own iPhones.
But nowadays the situation becomes changing because of the trend of Young Forty.
>> However, nowadays the situation is changing because of the ‘Young Forty’ trend.
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