Seperating school?

If seperating schools into girls only and boys only is good for education has been a hot topic for many years I think dviding them is not as good as not dividing them. Here are some reasons for my belief. Firstly, students can easily get bias and prejudice on the other sex. You can find so many stuffs which illustrate man and woman with streotype. Furthermore , adolescence is an important period to develope the good values. Therefore spending time with different gender teaches stutudents to establish real things in common and things different Secondly, they can learn how to respect each other properly. Being together they can be taught physical differences. The more they know the beter they can treat the other gender Nowadays, admiring and accepting differences is more and more emphasized. That\'s why seperating schools is an old fashioned idea. It is taking away great opportunities to understand each other from them. So these are why i insist schools shouldn\'t be divided.

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Seperating school?

If seperating schools into girls only and boys only is good for education has been a hot topic for many years

>>The separation of schools for girls and boys only is good for education, has been a hot topic for many years.

I think dividing them is not as good as not dividing them.

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or>>I think, dividing them is not as feasible as the opposite.

Here are some reasons for my belief.

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or>>Below are some of the reasons why this is what I believe.

Firstly, students can easily get bias and prejudice on the other sex.

>>Firstly, students can easily become biased and prejudiced on the opposite sex.

You can find so many stuffs which illustrate man and woman with streotype.

>>You can find so many stuffs which illustrate men and women with stereotypes.

Furthermore , adolescence is an important period to develope the good values.

>>Furthermore, adolescence is an important period in one’s life in order to develop some good values.

Therefore spending time with different gender teaches stutudents to establish real things in common and things different

>>Therefore, spending time with different genders teaches students to establish the reality between common and different things.

Secondly, they can learn how to respect each other properly.

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or>>Secondly, they will be able to know how to respect each other properly.

Being together they can be taught physical differences.

>>Being together can teach them their physical differences more.

The more they know the beter they can treat the other gender

>>The more they know about each other, the better they can treat the other gender well.

Nowadays, admiring and accepting differences is more and more emphasized.

>>Nowadays, admiring and accepting each other differences, is much more emphasized.

That\'s why separating schools is an old fashioned idea.

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or>>Which is why the separation of schools is a very conservative idea.

It is taking away great opportunities to understand each other from them.

>>It takes away their great opportunity to understand each other.

So these are why i insist schools shouldn\'t be divided.

>>So, these are the reasons why I insist schools shouldn\'t be divided.