Serious relationship or money.
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I would choose a person with no serious relationship. Why people need serious relationship. My idea is that people want to spend time with fun and meaningful. If I have enough money, I can do. These days, there are plenty of contents.I can enjoy with money. If necessary, I can gather people to play with me. As well, lots of people need money to save something precious. I will help them. I can make enough meaningful situations. If I am a rich person, I would go to travel around world. And I will find out people who needs my help. If you watch a movie Star Wars, You will know. The serious relationship make me unstable.
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>> I would choose a person with no serious relationship.
Why people need serious relationship.
>> Why do people need serious relationships?
My idea is that people want to spend time with fun and meaningful.
>> My idea is that people want to spend time with fun and meaningful time with each other.
If I have enough money, I can do. These days, there are plenty of contents.
>> If I have enough money, I can do it. These days, there are plenty of things to be considered.
I can enjoy with money.
>> I can enjoy by myself with my money.
If necessary, I can gather people to play with me.
>> Correct.
As well, lots of people need money to save something precious.
>> At the same time, lots of people need money to save something precious in their lives.
I will help them.
>> Correct.
I can make enough meaningful situations.
>> Correct.
If I am a rich person, I would go to travel around world.
>> If I am a rich person, I would go travel around the world.
And I will find out people who needs my help.
>> And I will find people who need my help.
If you watch a movie Star Wars, You will know.
>> If you watch the movie, \"Star Wars\", you will know.
The serious relationship make me unstable.
>> Serious relationships make me unstable.
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