sex education
학생이 쓴 원문
I think children need sex education as possible as from young.
From infancy, they should learn the physical difference between male and female openly.
One of rhe prob;ems with sex education is children learn sewual knowledge and perception through internet and negative ways.
There are stimilating video and sxually perverted acts in such information.
YouTube and internet are providing without limitation and regardless of age.
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Ms. [이름]!
Thank you for this thought. I always appreciate the insights you give in the class.
Have a great afternoon.
Aki~
I think children need sex education as possible as from young.
>>> I think children need sex education as much possible as from a young age.
From infancy, they should learn the physical difference between male and female openly.
>>> From infancy, they should learn the physical differences between males and females openly.
One of rhe prob;ems with sex education is children learn sewual knowledge and perception through internet and negative ways.
>>> One of the problems with sex education is children learn sexual knowledge and perception through the internet and negative ways.
There are stimilating video and sxually perverted acts in such information.
>>> There are stimulating videos and sexually perverted acts in such information.
YouTube and internet are providing without limitation and regardless of age.
>>> YouTube and the internet are providing information without limitation and regardless of age.
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