shameful with a rumble .
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Around 11 am, my boss and three of my co-worker was in front of my desk with me. my boss checked the file which I made. I made reference to three of my co-workers data. there was a wrong data by a co-worker's mistakes. as a result of the wrong data, my documents had a problem. my boss noticed it and gathered all of them. While checked it, suddenly my stomach rumbled. sadly, my desk area is very small. it has a smiliar size with small van. the sound from my stomach was sound like a thunder. ㅠ ㅠ I was not hungry. but my stomach moved like a big waves. it made me so shameful.
강사 첨삭
[이름],
Things like this happen, and yeah it's really embarrassing. Hahaha! Take it easy and just laugh about it. I had experiences like this before and I think it makes our life fun. ;)
XOXO,
Jenny
Here are some corrections:
Around 11 am, my boss and three of my co-worker was in front of my desk with me.
>> At around 11 am, my boss, my three co-workers and I were in front of my desk.
my boss checked the file which I made.
>>My boss is checking the files that I made.
I made reference to three of my co-workers data.
>> I made references from my three co-workers' data.
there was a wrong data by a co-worker's mistakes. as a result of the wrong data,
>> My co-worker made a mistake and it resulted to a wrong data.
as a result of the wrong data, My documents had a problem.
>>As a result, my documents had a problem.
my boss noticed it and gathered all of them.
>> My boss noticed it and gathered all the data.
While checked it, suddenly my stomach rumbled.
>> While he was checking it, my stomach suddenly grumbled.
sadly, my desk area is very small.
>>Sadly, my desk is very small.
it has a smiliar size with small van.
>>It is the size of a small van.
the sound from my stomach was sound like a thunder.
>> The sounds from my stomach sounded like thunder.
ㅠ ㅠ I was not hungry. but my stomach moved like a big waves.
>> I’m not hungry,but my stomach moved like big waves]
it made me so shameful.
>>It made me embarrased.
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