she could be
학생이 쓴 원문
I think if she were she can get a bachelor\'s degree in child welfare.
Of course we can avoid natural aging process as lack of concentration, getting worse of eyesight and sick of whole body and so on.
I had better we recognize those symtoms.
And we can do something whatever we can to try like diet, exercise, and regular habit...
I think it is not important a long lifespan but meaning living in our aging times.
강사 첨삭
Good afternoon, Ms. [이름]!
One\'s determination surpasses all obstacles.
Thank you for this!
Aki~
I think if she were she can get a bachelor\'s degree in child welfare.
>>> I think she will, if she takes a bachelor\'s degree in child welfare.
Of course we can avoid natural aging process as lack of concentration, getting worse of eyesight and sick of whole body and so on.
>>> Of course, we can avoid the natural aging process as lack of concentration, getting worse eyesight, and being sick in the whole body, and so on.
I had better we recognize those symtoms.
>>> I had better we recognize those symptoms.
And we can do something whatever we can to try like diet, exercise, and regular habit...
>>> And we can do something, whatever we can to try, like diet, exercise, and regular habits...
I think it is not important a long lifespan but meaning living in our aging times.
>>> I think it is not important to have a long lifespan, but a meaningful aging life.
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