Shold people be allowed guns

2020-05-25 · 첨삭 강사 Elly

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Some countries allow people to carry guns. America is the representitive country among them. There were a enourmous number of mess shooting acients. That\'s why so many debates are caused. Despite of these innocents deaths, still lots of people argue carrying gun is essential. It\'s illegal to have a gun in korea, it was hard for me to understand them, who continuously advocates gun carring. However when i read the reasons i started being able to understand them. Imagine you are in the middle of deep forest at late night with no one around, and suddenly a big guy starts chasing you with bad intention. As you see it, there is no way to fight against him except using a gun. That is why people who don\'t support gun control insist it is a exerllent self defence way.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름],

Thank you so much for the homework.

Have a fantastic Monday!

Teacher Elly.

Should people be allowed guns?

Some countries allow people to carry guns.

CORRECT!

or>>There are other countries that allow their citizens to carry guns.

America is the representitive country among them.

>>America is one of the countries representing them.

There were a enourmous number of mess shooting acients.

>>There were enormous numbers of mass shooting incidents.

That\'s why so many debates are caused.

>>That\'s why it caused so many debates.

Despite of these innocents deaths, still lots of people argue carrying gun is essential.

>>Despite these innocent deaths, lots of people still argue that carrying guns is essential.

It\'s illegal to have a gun in korea, it was hard for me to understand them, who continuously advocates gun carring.

>>It\'s illegal to have a gun in Korea, so it is hard for me to understand the people, who continuously advocate the carrying of guns.

However when i read the reasons i started being able to understand them.

>>However, when I read the reasons, I started to understand them.

Imagine you are in the middle of deep forest at late night with no one around, and suddenly a big guy starts chasing you with bad intention.

>>Imagine that you are in the middle of a deep forest late at night with no one around, and suddenly a big guy starts chasing you with bad intentions.

As you see it, there is no way to fight against him except using a gun.

>>As you can see, there is no way to fight him except if you have a gun.

That is why people who don\'t support gun control insist it is a exerllent self defence way.

>>That is why people, who don\'t support gun control, insist it is an excellent way of self-defense.

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