Shold people be allowed guns
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Should people be allowed guns?
Some countries allow people to carry guns.
CORRECT!
or>>There are other countries that allow their citizens to carry guns.
America is the representitive country among them.
>>America is one of the countries representing them.
There were a enourmous number of mess shooting acients.
>>There were enormous numbers of mass shooting incidents.
That\'s why so many debates are caused.
>>That\'s why it caused so many debates.
Despite of these innocents deaths, still lots of people argue carrying gun is essential.
>>Despite these innocent deaths, lots of people still argue that carrying guns is essential.
It\'s illegal to have a gun in korea, it was hard for me to understand them, who continuously advocates gun carring.
>>It\'s illegal to have a gun in Korea, so it is hard for me to understand the people, who continuously advocate the carrying of guns.
However when i read the reasons i started being able to understand them.
>>However, when I read the reasons, I started to understand them.
Imagine you are in the middle of deep forest at late night with no one around, and suddenly a big guy starts chasing you with bad intention.
>>Imagine that you are in the middle of a deep forest late at night with no one around, and suddenly a big guy starts chasing you with bad intentions.
As you see it, there is no way to fight against him except using a gun.
>>As you can see, there is no way to fight him except if you have a gun.
That is why people who don\'t support gun control insist it is a exerllent self defence way.
>>That is why people, who don\'t support gun control, insist it is an excellent way of self-defense.
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