Shopping

2010-06-22 · 첨삭 강사 janel

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I liked going shopping until few years ago. Since I had a big interest in fashion , buying fashion items was my pleasure. But nowadays I don't go shopping as much as I did. There are several reasons. Someday I realized that I didn't wear all my clothes. I only wore some of all my clothes. and I wore a company uniform in company. That reminded me that fashion wasn't important. so I have moved my interest of shopping from fashion to health. I spend more money to buy organic foods.

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Hi there [이름]! Here are your corrections: -Teacher JM   I liked going shopping until few years ago.I liked going shopping until a few years ago.Since I had a big interest in fashion , buying fashion items was my pleasure.Since I had a big interest in fashion, buying fashion items was my pleasure.But nowadays I don't go shopping as much as I did.But nowadays I don't go shopping as much anymore.There are several reasons.Correct^^Someday I realized that I didn't wear all my clothes.One day, I realized that I didn't wear all my clothes.I only wore some of all my clothes. I only wore some of my clothes.and I wore a company uniform in company.and I only wore a uniform inside my company.That reminded me that fashion wasn't important.Correct. Better>>>That reminded me that fashion wasn't really important.so I have moved my interest of shopping from fashion to health.so I have moved my interest of shopping from fashion to health.I spend more money to buy organic foods. I am now spending more money to buy organic foods.

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