shopping
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I like shopping at the internet shopping mall rather than to go shopping at the department store. Product at the department store is luxurious and expensive. Especially brand-name product is too expensive. On the other hand, Internet shopping mall products are cheap and various. Sometimes It is too various product to pick so I exhausted. Oftentimes I like to go shopping at small shop when I buy clothes. If I buy books, I'll go to library to search books and then I'll buy books at the internet bookstore. But when I buy shoes, I go to shop.
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Hi [이름],
I agree with you it is also very convenient and hassle-free.
Enjoy your weekend.
I can’t wait to talk to you on Monday,
Connie
I like shopping at the internet shopping mall rather than to go shopping at the department store.
>> I like online shopping rather than shopping in the department store.
Product at the department store is luxurious and expensive.
>> Products at the department store are luxurious and expensive.
Especially brand-name product is too expensive.
>> Especially, signature products are too expensive.
On the other hand, Internet shopping mall products are cheap and various.
>> ON the other hand, online shopping are cheap and you can have a lot of choices.
Sometimes It is too various product to pick so I exhausted.
>> Sometimes it’s tiring to choose various products.
Oftentimes I like to go shopping at small shop when I buy clothes.
>> Oftentimes, I buy clothes online.
If I buy books, I'll go to library to search books and then I'll buy books at the internet bookstore.
>> If I buy books, I go to the library to search and after that I’ll order it online.
But when I buy shoes, I go to shop.
>> When I want to buy shoes, I go to a shop.
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