shopping and travel

2022-08-08 · 첨삭 강사 Aki

학생이 쓴 원문

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강사 첨삭

Hi there Julia!
Got the file. please check the corrected sentences and make sure to be familiar with them. Have a great day and fighting on your Opic lessons
Aki~

Do you like shopping? What do you shop for and who do you shop with?

I like to go shopping when I have some free time on a daily basis. 

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because I am interested in fashion and I want to be more fashionable so I usually go shopping on weekend with my husband. 

>>> CORRECT!

Sometimes I go to lots of store in shopping mall with my friends. because I like to talk with them while looking around. 

>>> CORRECT!

When I choose the clothes I try on it and I take advice FROM them.

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Or >>> I get advice from them when I choose and try on some clothes.

after when I decided it I pay by credit card 

>>> Then I pay ith with my credit card.

Shopping is like relaxation for me because I feel fulfilled after buying something wonderful for myself.

>>> CORRECT!

Shopping is a good way to relax my mind and improve my mood.

>>> CORRECT!

So I am able to choose and get great clothes.

>>> CORRECT!

finally I like to casual clothes because I usualy them lots of excising.

>>>  I usually shop for casual clothes because I can use them when I exercise.


TRAVELING

Most people want to travel these days I also like to go tripS.

>>> CORRECT!

There are lots of beautiful cities everywhere in Korea.

>>> CORRECT!

There are lots of beautiful cities everywhere in Korea.so I am able to to get beautiful places when they have a chance. 

>>> CORRECT!

I want to climb famous 100 moutain in Korea.

>>> I want to climb the famous 100 mountains in Korea.

One of them I want to climb the Hanra mountain which is located ON Jeju island

>>> CORRECT!

It is the highest mountain and I can see beautiful scenery every changed season there. 

>>> It is the highest mountain and I can see beautiful scenery every changing season there. 

so I am able to see famous places and seeshore and I also eat fresh seefood and

>>> so I am able to see famous places and beaches and I also eat fresh seafood. 

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