shopping at online shopping mall.

I prefer to shop at online shopping mall. If I decide to go to the department store to buy clothes directly, I need someone to go with me. That's because I need someone to see if the suit fits me when I wear the suit. However It will take time to go to the store and to find someone to go around with me. Some people told me "why don't you go shopping alone?" However It feels very lonely when going alone to the department store. On the other hand, There are lots of merits in shopping at online I can save my time and money because only I have to do is just watching, clicking what I want to buy, and paying. Second, there are many models who has physical condition which is simliar to me, so I can see if this clothes would be fit for me or not without wearing the suit.

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