Shopping centers
학생이 쓴 원문
Maybe I cannot live on without smart phone. Honestly, I use my phone for about 4 hours a day and I know it is quite much time. I tried to live without phone because phone battery was gone. It was hard time for me. I couldn’t check friends’ contact and couldn’t listen to music.
1. These days I can find shopping centers anywhere. Especially, whenever I try to buy clothes or [이름]s, I go to downtown because there are many shopping store as many as I cannot see whole centers. Most of all, I enjoy to go upsquare that includes books, clothes, shoes, and so on.
2. I don’t go shopping center that much. I enjoy to surf the internet because it is really convenient. Also, if I want to get a specific stuff, I can find the most quality stuff. I go shopping centers one time a month. The reason why I don’t go well shopping centers is that internet is much cheaper.
강사 첨삭
Smartphones. hahaha. Really Cherry?
>> Maybe I cannot live without my smart phone.
Honestly, I use my phone for about 4 hours a day and I know it is quite much time.
>> Honestly, I use my phone for about 4 hours a day and I know it is quite too much.
I tried to live without phone because phone battery was gone.
>> I tried to live without my phone when the phone battery is drained.
It was hard time for me. I couldn’t check friends’ contact and couldn’t listen to music.
>> It was hard time for me. I couldn’t check my friends’ messages and I couldn’t listen to music.
>> It was hard time for me. I couldn’t check my friends’ messages and I couldn’t listen to music.
1. These days I can find shopping centers anywhere.
>> Correct.
Especially, whenever I try to buy clothes or [이름]s, I go to downtown because there are many shopping store as many as I cannot see whole centers.
>> Especially, whenever I try to buy clothes or [이름]s, I go downtown because there are many shopping stores.
Most of all, I enjoy to go upsquare that includes books, clothes, shoes, and so on.
>> Most of all, I enjoy to go up-squares that includes books, clothes, shoes, and so on.
>> Most of all, I enjoy to go up-squares that includes books, clothes, shoes, and so on.
2. I don’t go shopping center that much.
>> 2. I don’t go to shopping centers that much.
I enjoy to surf the internet because it is really convenient.
>> I enjoy surfing the internet because it is really convenient.
Also, if I want to get a specific stuff, I can find the most quality stuff.
>> Also, if I want to get a specific stuff, I can find something with the best quality.
I go shopping centers one time a month.
>> I go to shopping centers once a month.
The reason why I don’t go well shopping centers is that internet is much cheaper.
>> The reason why I don’t go to shopping centers that much is because shopping on the internet is much cheaper.파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.