Shopping is the favorite pastime for most of the young people. Why do you think is that? Do you thin
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Shopping is the favorite pastime for most of the young people. Why do you think is that? Do you think they should be encouraged to do some other useful activities?
Shopping has many benefits and disadvantages for young people.
Shopping gives us a lot of fun and reduces stress and depression.
We should walk a lot to buy things. This is good for our health.
but There is a possibility of buying impulses.That's terrific.
This can lead to bad habits and card abuse.
I want to encourage them to do fun jumping cycle exercises.
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>>correct
Shopping gives us a lot of fun and reduces stress and depression.
Shopping gives us a lot of fun and reduces stress and depression.
>>correct
We should walk a lot to buy things.
We should walk a lot to buy things.
>>correct
This is good for our health.
>>correct
but There is a possibility of buying impulses.
but There is a possibility of buying impulses.
>>However, impulse buying is not good.
That\'s terrific.
>>correct
This can lead to bad habits and card abuse.
>>correct
I want to encourage them to do fun jumping cycle exercises.
This can lead to bad habits and card abuse.
>>correct
I want to encourage them to do fun jumping cycle exercises.
>>I want to encourage them to do some indoor cycling exercises.
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