Should bosses be strict or friendly? Which is more effective?
학생이 쓴 원문
I think bosses should be strict. Honestly, in perspective of employees, it is impossible to have closed relationship with their boss. Additionally, if a boss is too friendly to their employees, they end up being taken lightly their boss. This situation causes a lot of side effects. For instance, suppose that a project due date is coming but a team doesn\'t finish the report. In this case, if the boss is too friendly, it\'s too hard to give a pressure to their employee. Or although the boss give order to finish the report, it might be considered lightly.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Mary! You gave a clear opinion and supported it with a realistic workplace example, which is excellent. Your reasoning is logical and easy to follow. To improve further, focus on natural expressions, prepositions, and passive voice usage. With small grammar adjustments, this answer sounds strong and persuasive. Nice work!
-Teacher Wela
Honestly, in perspective of employees, it is impossible to have closed relationship with their boss.
>> Honestly, from the perspective of employees, it is difficult to have a close relationship with their boss.
Additionally, if a boss is too friendly to their employees, they end up being taken lightly their boss.
>> Additionally, if a boss is too friendly with their employees, they may end up being taken lightly by their employees.
This situation causes a lot of side effects.
>> This situation can cause many negative side effects.
For instance, suppose that a project due date is coming but a team doesn\'t finish the report.
>> For instance, suppose a project deadline is approaching, but a team has not finished the report.
In this case, if the boss is too friendly, it\'s too hard to give a pressure to their employee.
>> In this case, if the boss is too friendly, it becomes difficult to put pressure on their employees.
Or although the boss give order to finish the report, it might be considered lightly.
>> Even if the boss gives an order to finish the report, it might not be taken seriously.
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