Should boys and girls be in separate classes?
학생이 쓴 원문
Should boys and girls be in separate classes?
I don\'t think so.
I think it is better in combine the boys and girls.
There are some reasons.
First of all, It can helps makig a good socialization.
It is necessary to practice socialization in advance at school.
After grow up, The company works without distinction between men and women.
second, It can learns the right gender role naturally.
That is why it\'s absolutely necessary in combine boys and girls.
남자와 여자 합반이 좋다고 생각한다.`
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2.올바른 성 역할을 자연스럽게 익힐 수 있다.
강사 첨삭
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>>correct
I think it is better in combine the boys and girls.
I think it is better in combine the boys and girls.
>>I think it is better to combine the boys and girls.
There are some reasons.
There are some reasons.
>>correct
First of all, It canhelps makig a good socialization.
>>First of all, it can help build a good relationship.
It is necessary to practice socialization in advance at school.
It is necessary to practice socialization in advance at school.
>>correct
After grow up, The company works without distinction between men and women.
>>After we become adults and we work on the company, we will be able to work well with men and women.
second, It can learns the right gender role naturally.
After grow up, The company works without distinction between men and women.
>>After we become adults and we work on the company, we will be able to work well with men and women.
second, It can learns the right gender role naturally.
>>Second, we will be able to learn about gender roles.
That is why it\'s absolutely necessary in combine boys and girls.
>>That is why it\'s absolutely necessary to combine boys and girls.
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