Should children be involved in household chores, or should parents do everything?
학생이 쓴 원문
If household chores are safe, children should learn how to work. When children learn about household chores at the first time, they might make a lot of mistake and it\'s hard time to parents. And parent may think they do chores is easier than teaching their children. However after their parent teaching several times, they can do it themselves. After that, considering the future when parents travel for a long time, children can care themselves.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Mary! You explained your ideas well, and your points were clear and logical. I especially liked how you highlighted both the short-term challenges and the long-term benefits of teaching children to do household chores. Your reasoning shows strong critical thinking. To improve your writing further, focus on using plural forms correctly (like “mistakes” and “parents”), fixing small grammar issues, and making your sentences smoother and more natural. Keep practicing, you are getting better and better each time! If you want, I can also help you rewrite it in a more advanced style.
-Teacher Wela
If household chores are safe, children should learn how to work.
>> If the household chores are safe, children should learn how to do them.
>> If the household chores are safe, children should learn how to do them.
When children learn about household chores at the first time, they might make a lot of mistake and it\'s hard time to parents.
>> When children learn household chores for the first time, they might make a lot of mistakes, and it can be a hard time for parents.
And parent may think they do chores is easier than teaching their children.
>> And parents may think that doing the chores themselves is easier than teaching their children.
However after their parent teaching several times, they can do it themselves.
>> However, after the parents teach them several times, the children can do it themselves.
After that, considering the future when parents travel for a long time, children can care themselves.
>> After that, in the future when the parents travel for a long time, the children will be able to take care of themselves.
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