Should drunk drivers be treated as patients or criminals?

2015-04-09 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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Drunk driving does not only harm you, but also puts other innocent people in danger. It is a criminal act. I also sometimes drink and drive although I’m well aware that I shouldn’t do it. In Korea, the proxy driving or so called Driving for Pay service is common and there are a hundred of companies that provide the service. So, when you are drunk, you can call them and he/she will arrive at your place within a few minutes and drive you home at very a reasonable price. If you are caught drunk driving, you have to pay a large amount of fine and your driver license might be suspended or revoked depending on the alcohol level. The Blood Alcohol Concentration(BAC) level or Driving Under the Influence of alcohol(DUI) is a 0.05 percent in Korea. The 0.05 BAC amounts to a bottle of bear. I have actually experienced intoxicated driving. If I drive after drinking a few glass of bear and drive, I tend to drive faster and much aggressively than usual. I become less cautious and lose control.

강사 첨삭

Hi Sir [이름].

Yes, it is really difficult to drive when you are under the influence of alcohol.

There were times that my cousins drive even though they are intoxicated and it makes me really scared.

After drinking alcoholic beverages, we should be more cautious.

There are other people whose lives might be in danger.

Thanks for your composition.

Teacher Nina

Drunk driving does not only harm you, but also puts other innocent people in danger.

>> correct

It is a criminal act.

>> correct

I also sometimes drink and drive although I’m well aware that I shouldn’t do it.

>> correct

In Korea, the proxy driving or so called Driving for Pay service is common and there are a hundred of companies that provide the service.

>> correct

>> In Korea, the proxy driving or so called Driving for Pay service is common. And there are a hundred of companies that provide the service.

So, when you are drunk, you can call them and he/she will arrive at your place within a few minutes and drive you home at very a reasonable price.

>> correct

If you are caught drunk driving, you have to pay a large amount of fine and your driver license might be suspended or revoked depending on the alcohol level.

>> correct

The Blood Alcohol Concentration(BAC) level or Driving Under the Influence of alcohol(DUI) is a 0.05 percent in Korea.

>> The Blood Alcohol Concentration(BAC) level or Driving Under the Influence of alcohol(DUI) is 0.05 percent in Korea.

The 0.05 BAC amounts to a bottle of bear.

>> correct ( spelling check: beer ^^)

I have actually experienced intoxicated driving.

>> correct

If I drive after drinking a few glass of bear and drive, I tend to drive faster and much aggressively than usual.

>> If I drive after drinking few glasses of beer, I tend to drive faster and much aggressively than usual.

>> Better: If I need to go home by car, after I drink few glasses of beer, I drive my car faster and more aggressively than usual.

I become less cautious and lose control.

>> correct

>> I lose control and less cautious after drinking beer.

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