Should entertainment companies stop announcing celebrities’ flight schedules to prevent overcrowding
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Many agencies disclose celebrities’ flight schedules beforehand. This is because companies want to advertise events that celebrities are participating in or naturally promote items through the photoshoot. However, celebrities’ presence cause massive debacle at the airport causes inconvenience to other passengers. Therefore, these agencies should stop announcing celebrities’ flight schedule. Even though they do not officialize fans who can discover it in other ways, it is different from tons of fan girls dominating airports with their massive, long-range cameras. When I was on the flight to Tokyo from Gimpo airport, the small international terminal was vandalized by fans of Seventeen. I almost missed the flight because it was difficult for me to find a way out through the girls with massive, long-range cameras. Airport is the public infrastructure, so celebrities must not commercialize through their fan base by doing harm to others.
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Thank you for this, Aciel!
Many agencies disclose celebrities’ flight schedules beforehand.
>>> correct
This is because companies want to advertise events that celebrities are participating in or naturally promote items through the photoshoots. >>> correct
However, celebrities’ presence cause massive debacle at the airport causes inconvenience to other passengers.
>>> However, celebrities’ presence causes massive debacles at airports, creating inconvenience for other passengers.
Therefore, these agencies should stop announcing celebrities’ flight schedule.
>>> correct
Even though they do not officialize fans who can discover it in other ways, it is different from tons of fan girls dominating airports with their massive, long-range cameras.
>>> Even though they do not officially authorize fans, who can discover the schedules in other ways, it is different from tons of fangirls dominating airports with massive, long-range cameras.
When I was on the flight to Tokyo from Gimpo airport, the small international terminal was vandalized by fans of Seventeen.
>>> correct
I almost missed the flight because it was difficult for me to find a way out through the girls with massive, long-range cameras.
>>> correct
Airport is the public infrastructure, so celebrities must not commercialize through their fan base by doing harm to others.
>>> Airports are public infrastructure, so celebrities must not commercialize them through their fan base at the expense of others.
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