Should food waste be given to those who are hungry? Why or why not?
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Poverty is serious problem.
>>CORRECT!
Many people are dying in the world because of food shortage.
>> CORRECT!
Total amount of agricultural products is increasing continuously thanks to development of technology but, it is used for keeping livestocks not humans.
>>CORRECT!
Also, Areas of producing crops are dense in some countries.
>>CORRECT!
So, foods are left out in some countries but most people are hard to eat one meal even in the other countries.
>>CORRECT!
Thus, we can use food wastes which can eat for poor people.
>>Thus, we can use food wastes which can be eaten by poor people.
For example, everyday, a lot of foods like bread and fruits are threw away in supermarket because of pull date although it doesn’t go bad.
>>CORRECT!
So, these foods can be given for poor people.
>>So, these foods can be given to poor people.
Supermarket can contribute social problem and also, they can reduce cost for throwing away food waste.
>>Supermarket can contribute social problem and also, they can reduce cost for throwing food wastes.
I think it have bigger social and economical benefit than just throwing away.
>> I think it has bigger social and economical benefit than just throwing away.
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