Should goals always be realistic, or is it okay to dream big even if it’s unlikely?
학생이 쓴 원문
I think goals need to be higher than what we can actually do. Because if we set goals which we can achieve easily, these goals don\'t motivate us to improve ourselves. When the goals are too difficult to achieve, we might feel failure. However, we should try to success of portion of the goals. During this process, we grow our ability and it give us positive effect. And I think that the younger the experience, the more helpful it is. Therefore, it\'s important to teach children to set big dream.
강사 첨삭
Hi! You did a great job explaining your ideas about setting big goals. I like how you highlighted that even if a goal is challenging, trying to achieve it helps us grow and gain positive experiences. Your reasoning shows a strong understanding of motivation and personal development. To make your writing even stronger, focus on using correct verb forms and articles (for example, “we should try to achieve a portion of the goals” instead of “try to success of portion of the goals”), smoothing sentences for clarity (for example, “During this process, we grow our abilities and gain positive effects”), and maintaining consistency in singular and plural forms (“abilities” instead of “ability” when referring generally). Overall, your explanation is thoughtful and inspiring. Keep practicing, and try rewriting a few sentences with these adjustments to make your ideas flow even better!
-Teacher Wela
I think goals need to be higher than what we can actually do.
>> I think goals should be higher than what we can currently achieve.
Because if we set goals which we can achieve easily, these goals don\'t motivate us to improve ourselves.
>> If we set goals that are too easy to achieve, they won’t motivate us to improve ourselves.
When the goals are too difficult to achieve, we might feel failure.
>> When goals are too difficult to achieve, we might feel like we have failed.
However, we should try to success of portion of the goals.
>> However, we should try to achieve at least part of our goals.
During this process, we grow our ability and it give us positive effect.
>> During this process, we develop our abilities, and it has a positive effect on us.
And I think that the younger the experience, the more helpful it is.
>> I also think that the earlier we gain this experience, the more helpful it is.
Therefore, it\'s important to teach children to set big dream.
>> Therefore, it’s important to teach children to set big dreams.
>> Therefore, it’s important to teach children to set big dreams.
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