Should I request the correction of my writing?

1. A clause is a group of 2 words or more not including a subject and a verb. A phrase include a subject and a verb. 2. An Chulsu is treated many makebates of. 3. In Korea, powerplay remains unchanged. 4. I went to the Rose park with my mom and puppy near my apartment. 5. We took a picture front of many roses. 6. How much were your monthly poper bill at that time? 7. The amount on my cell phone bill were about 30 thousands won. 8. Isn't it? Young people in elementary have a cell phone. 9. It's right in middle school or elementary?

Hi Ms. [이름]! Thanks for dropping by. ^^ I corrected some of your sentences here. Please review my corrections and feel free to ask me any question if something is unclear to you. Great job, by the way.  Keep it up! CIAO! ~Teacher Marie~ Should I request the correction of my writing? >> May I request some corrections of my writing? 1. A clause is a group of 2 words or more not including a subject and a verb. >> CORRECTA phrase include a subject and a verb. >> A phrase includes a subject and a verb.2. An Chulsu is treated many makebates of. >> An Chulsu is a makebate. *Makebate is a noun, it means a person who causes contention or discord. ^^3. In Korea, powerplay remains unchanged. >> CORRECT *Great sentence! ^^4. I went to the Rose park with my mom and puppy near my apartment. >> I went to the Rose park near my apartment with my mom and my puppy.5. We took a picture front of many roses. >> We took a picture in front of many roses.6. How much were your monthly poper bill at that time? >> How much was your monthly bill at that time?7. The amount on my cell phone bill were about 30 thousands won. >> The amount of my cellphone bill was about 30 thousand won. OR >> My cellphone bill was about 30 thousand won.8. Isn\'t it? Young people in elementary have a cell phone. >> Young people in elementary have cellphones. *I don\'t understand why you placed the tag question \'isn\'t it?\' at the start of this sentence. 9. It\'s right in middle school or elementary? >> Was it right from middle school or elementary?