Should laws about movement restrictions be stricter, more flexible, or better enforced? Give reasons
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The movement restrictions are being imposed on the criminals after their release. Especially this rule applies to the ones who have been sentenced to sexual assault. This law is enforced to protect public safety. Even though offenders spend their time in prison, it is difficult to correct their actions because the sex crime is closer to their faulty instincts. However, there are rising calls from public to make sure movement restrictions are better enforced. This is because it is the neighbors who suffer damage not the criminals. The neighbors fear about the possible disorder and high likelihood of crime. When Mr. [Name], notorious South Korean minor sex offender, got released from the prison and returned home. Many neighbors suffered from debacle caused by influencers and many families had to protect their children without any help from authorities. I believe it is better to make a village such as United States where sex offenders can live together.
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Thank you for this, Aciel. Have a great evening!
The movement restrictions are being imposed on the criminals after their release.
>>> correct
Especially this rule applies to the ones who have been sentenced to sexual assault. >>> This rule especially applies to those who have been sentenced for sexual assault.
This law is enforced to protect public safety.
>>> correct
Even though offenders spend their time in prison, it is difficult to correct their actions because the sex crime is closer to their faulty instincts.
>>> correct
However, there are rising calls from public to make sure movement restrictions are better enforced.
>>> However, there are rising calls from the public to make sure movement restrictions are better enforced.
This is because it is the neighbors who suffer damage, not the criminals.
>>> correct
The neighbors fear about the possible disorder and high likelihood of crime.
>>> The neighbors fear possible disorder and the high likelihood of crime.
When Mr. [Name], notorious South Korean minor sex offender, got released from the prison and returned home. Many neighbors suffered from debacle caused by influencers and many families had to protect their children without any help from authorities.
>>> When Cho Doo-soon, a notorious minor sex offender in South Korea, was released from prison and returned home, many neighbors suffered from the debacle caused by influencers, and many families had to protect their children without much help from the authorities.
I believe it is better to make a village such as United States where sex offenders can live together.
>>> I believe it is better to create a village, such as in the United States, where sex offenders can live together.
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