Should military service be mandatory or optional? Why?

2023-03-20 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

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I think military service should be mandatory. It\'s because nowadays\' the rate of fertility is decreasing. So the number of military service\'s are lacking. I think it is very serious problem in Korea. Now, Korean government is suggesting the benefit of delivery. But I don\'t know what can we do some more good solution for increase the rate of fertility.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Daisy! ^^ A pleasant Monday to you.
Thank you for sharing your opinion about this.
I agree that your fertility rate in South Korea is a very serious matter primarily because you\'re still in the middle of a war with North Korea.
With the decreasing number of abled men going to the military, your country\'s safety is really at risk.
Anyhow, I hope your government finds a sustainable solution to this growing problem.
See you in later this evening. :)
~Teacher Charry

I think military service should be mandatory.

>> CORRECT!

It\'s because nowadays\' the rate of fertility is decreasing.

>> CORRECT!

So the number of military service\'s are lacking.

>> So, the number of men going to the military service is lacking.

I think it is very serious problem in Korea.

>> I think it is a very serious problem in Korea.

Now, Korean government is suggesting the benefit of delivery.

>> Right now, the Korean government is suggesting to give benefits to couples who will deliver babies.

But I don\'t know what can we do some more good solution for increase the rate of fertility.

>> But I don\'t know what can we do more or what better solutions we can offer to increase the rate of fertility.

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