Should parents make their children face challenges?

2019-10-25 · 첨삭 강사 Oneil

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I think parents should make their children face challenges. Life is full of challenges. After growing up, people face a lot of things and problems that are not expected. They must manage those problems. Maybe some people would not be successful and taste failure. It is a part of life; challenges, failure, and success are always repeated. If parents don’t make their children face challenges or teach them how to overcome stressful situations coming from a failure, children would not be able to manage their life on their own. Parents, however, should be careful not to expose their children in a too stressful situation. Children would be too scared to challenge the same thing next time. Having their children do some sports would be a good choice. Sports is always challenging. Children would realize that one should work hard to achieve something they want. Doing so, children would have a fulfilling experience which will encourage them to overcome challenges in the future.

강사 첨삭

Amazing opinion dear. See you in class. :)

I think parents should make their children face challenges. 
>> Correct. 

Life is full of challenges. After growing up, people face a lot of things and problems that are not expected. 
>> Correct. 

They must manage those problems. 
>> Correct. 

Maybe some people would not be successful and taste failure.
>> Correct. 

 It is a part of life; challenges, failure, and success are always repeated. 
>> Correct. 

If parents don’t make their children face challenges or teach them how to overcome stressful situations coming from a failure, children would not be able to manage their life on their own.
>> Correct. 

Parents, however, should be careful not to expose their children in a too stressful situation.
>> Parents, however, should be careful not to expose their children in very stressful situation.

 Children would be too scared to challenge the same thing next time.
>> Correct. 

 Having their children do some sports would be a good choice.
>> Correct. 

 Sports is always challenging.
>> Correct. 

 Children would realize that one should work hard to achieve something they want. 
>> Correct. 

Doing so, children would have a fulfilling experience which will encourage them to overcome challenges in the future.
>> Correct. 

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