Should people make their children live easily without challenges, or should they face challenges?
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Dear [Name],
I think most person want to live their child without challenges. Because it is difficult to achieve and if their child fail, it will be unhappy and sad situation. In my opinion, parents can not live forever with their child. So if possible, we give a motive to achieve something to them and make a training to live along.
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Hello [이름]! :)
Thank you so much for answering your homework.
Have a wonderful day. :)
- Tricia
I think most person want to live their child without challenges.
>> I think most people want their children to live without any challenges.
Because it is difficult to achieve and if their child fail, it will be unhappy and sad situation.
>> Because it is difficult to achieve things and if their child fails, it will be an unhappy situation.
In my opinion, parents can not live forever with their child.
>> In my opinion, parents can not live with their children forever.
So if possible, we give a motive to achieve something to them and make a training to live along.
>> So if possible, we motivate them to achieve something and train them to live alone.
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