Should people of between 50 and 55 be forced to retire from their jobs in order to make way for youn
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Hi Su ^^
Great job! Just refrain from using the conjunction \"and\" in every sentence :)
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I think it is unreasonable situation, that old people should retire from their occupation to give younger workers opportunities.
>>> I think it is an unreasonable situation, that old people should retire from their occupation to give younger workers opportunities.
It doesn’t avail to see the employment problem binary.
>>> correct
Mostly, in east Asian countries, people live with their family.
>>> correct
And even in western countries, the pension is a huge problem, because of the decreasing birthrate.
>>> correct
If the senior citizens don’t work, then the junior must work hard.
>>> correct
And also the active life expectancy are extending, because of the advance in medical science.
>>> And also the active life expectancy are expanding, because of the advance in medical science.
When they quit their work around 50, then they have to do nothing for around 40 years or more.
>>> When they quit their job around 50, then they have to do nothing for around 40 years or more.
Removing the jobs of old to make way for young people is not the solution.
>>> correct
They have also wisdom and working together with them can be a benefit and it is exactly the opportunity.
>>> correct
And working and using brain are healthy for mental and body as well.
>>> correct
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