Should people stop eating fast food? Why or why not?

2023-01-02 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

학생이 쓴 원문

Yes. It\'s because the meat that ingredient of fast food will destroy forest environment. Because the pork or the cow that will be a meat are need to live in the very large ground. And for make their environment, we need to cut the trees. Then, the forest will disappear and if we eat meat after that it raise gas in our body. So the earth will be hot by the meat.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Daisy. ^^
Thank you for diligently answering this essay question even if it\'s a bit late.

I agree that people should stop consuming fast food because it is detrimental to the body. We may acquire a number of diseases such as diabetes, hearth attack and stroke from eating fast food all the time.
Anyhow, I hope you\'re sleeping soundly right now.
See you again tomorrow. ^^
~Teacher Charry :)

Yes.

>> Yes, they should.

It\'s because the meat that ingredient of fast food will destroy forest environment.

>> It\'s because the meat used as an ingredient in fast food can destroy the forest or environment.

Because the pork or the cow that will be a meat are need to live in the very large ground.

>> It\'s because the pig or the cow that will be used for meat need to live in a very large ground.

And for make their environment, we need to cut the trees.

>> In addition, to provide a place for them to stay at, we need to cut the trees.

Then, the forest will disappear and if we eat meat after that it raise gas in our body.

>> Then, the forest will disappear and if we continuously consume meat we will produce gaseous wastes.

So the earth will be hot by the meat.

>> As a result, the earth will become warmer due to the gaseous wastes from consuming meat.

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