Should people take a break from social media if it causes stress, or is that too extreme? Why?
학생이 쓴 원문
If you are under stress from social media, it\'s probably because you are comparing you to others.
Comparing isn\'t meaningful. It just causes jealous and depressed.
Stop using SNS and remove the apps from your phone, if you are under the stress.
It will give you a peace of [이름]d.
강사 첨삭
Your response is clear, direct, and gives practical advice about dealing with stress from social media. I especially like how you identified comparison as the main source of stress, which shows strong critical thinking and understanding of human behavior. Your suggestions, such as removing apps and taking a break, are realistic and helpful. To improve, focus on correct word forms like \"yourself,\" \"jealousy,\" and \"comparison,\" and smoother sentence flow. Overall, your answer is insightful, concise, and offers meaningful advice, great job!
-Teacher Wela
If you are under stress from social media, it\'s probably because you are comparing you to others.
>> If you are stressed by social media, it\'s probably because you are comparing yourself to others.
Comparing isn\'t meaningful.
>> Comparison isn\'t meaningful.
It just causes jealous and depressed.
>> It just causes jealousy and depression.
Stop using SNS and remove the apps from your phone, if you are under the stress.
>> If you are under stress, you should stop using social media and remove the apps from your phone.
It will give you a peace of [이름]d.
>> It will give you peace of [이름]d.
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