Should poor people be punished for stealing if they are stealing to feed their families?
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Actually, I don\'t have any opinion about this topic, but I think it is a problem of a social system.
In this world, there are a lot of social systems, but they are not all prefect to the people.
Because of this reason, We can stop the increasing of poor people.
So I think we have to try to make a social system more perfectly and fairly.
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Actually, I don\'t have any opinion about this topic, but I think it is a problem of a social system.
>>CORRECT
In this world, there are a lot of social systems, but they are not all prefect to the people.
>> CORRECT
Because of this reason, We can stop the increasing of poor people.
>> Because of this reason, we can stop the increase in number of poor people.
So I think we have to try to make a social system more perfectly and fairly.
>> So, I think we have to try to change the social system into a better one.
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