Should schools have better security? Why or why not?

2023-05-02 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

학생이 쓴 원문

Yes. It\'s because in my school, some students go out during lunch time. And some other people saw it so they waited until they come in again. But the students didn\'t come. I think they come to school through other door. So I think our school has to have better security system.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Daisy. ^^
Thank you for once again answering your essay homework.
I agree that schools should have a better security system for the students\' safety.

If unknown people can easily enter a school, they can potentially do something bad to the students just like the mass shooting incidents that are happening in America.
Anyhow, I hope you\'re having a great evening.
See you in class later. ^^
~Teacher Charry

Yes.

>> Yes, they should.

It\'s because in my school, some students go out during lunch time.

>> CORRECT!

And some other people saw it so they waited until they come in again.

>> So, other people who saw it, waited until they come in again.

But the students didn\'t come.

>> But the students didn\'t come back.

I think they come to school through other door.

>> I think they come to school through another door.

So I think our school has to have better security system.

>> So I think our school has to have a better security system.

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