Should schools or companies have more holidays? Why or why not?
학생이 쓴 원문
I tell you as an employee, yes I need more holidays.
I always look forward to a holiday that is upco[이름]g.
If there will be no holidays for a while longer, I might lose my motivation to work hard.
I think holiday is needed at least once a month.
강사 첨삭
You gave a clear and relatable answer from an employee\'s perspective, which makes your response more personal and convincing. Your point about holidays helping maintain motivation is practical and easy to understand. To improve, focus on articles (a holiday), smoother phrasing (upco[이름]g holidays), and natural sentence structure. Overall, your response is concise, logical, and effective, nice work!
-Teacher Wela
I tell you as an employee, yes I need more holidays.
>> As an employee, I think we need more holidays.
I always look forward to a holiday that is upco[이름]g.
>> I always look forward to upco[이름]g holidays.
If there will be no holidays for a while longer, I might lose my motivation to work hard.
>> If there are no holidays for a long time, I might lose my motivation to work hard.
I think holiday is needed at least once a month.
>> I think a holiday is needed at least once a month.
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