Should student’s textbooks be replaced by notebook computers? What do you think about it?

2015-08-19 · 첨삭 강사 Kris

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Introduction In the future, our study way will be change because our science skills are developed.Today our debaters will discuss whether textbooks will change into notebook computers or not.Let's see what Jack and Ashley have to say. Debater1 Ashley Textbooks should not change into notebook computers. If,we using computers our eyesight is getting worse and worse.We use many media for learning subject.We can't concentrate what we study.Students will be watch TV and play games using computers. Debater2Jack Textbooks should change into notebook computers.Students can be very boring using the textbooks.They will think what he/or she want to do because using textbook is boring. Also, using textbook can't memorize well.When we use online we can more improve than textbook.We can improve listening, speak, word,grammar.We can improve 4things at the same time. I am a Jack.Student's textboos should replaced by notebook computers.

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Hi there, [이름]! Good evening! kkkk   You have such a good imagination for you even used a scenario to answer your homework. I like it! kkkk Regarding your sentence construction, I noticed that you don\'t put a space after the punctuation mark, period (.). I\'ve already told you that there should be a space every after a punctuation mark. But you did good in constructing the sentences. There were few corrections but that\'s ok. kiki ~~T. Kris~~   Introduction >> CORRECT!In the future, our study way will be change because our science skills are developed. >> In the future, the way we study will be changed because Science is continuously developing. Today our debaters will discuss whether textbooks will change into notebook computers or not. >> Today, our debaters will discuss whether textbooks should be changed into notebook computers or not. Let\'s see what Jack and Ashley have to say. >> CORRECT! OR: >> Let\'s hear the opinions of Jack and Ashley. Debater1 Ashley >> [Debater 1- ASHLEY]Textbooks should not change into notebook computers. >> Textbooks should not be changed into notebook computers. OR: >> Textbooks should not be replaced by notebook computers. If,we using computers our eyesight is getting worse and worse. >> If we use computers, our eyesight will get worse. We use many media for learning subject. >> We are using many media in learning about the subject. We can\'t concentrate what we study. >> We can\'t concentrate on what we have to study. Students will be watch TV and play games using computers. >> Students will be watching TV and will be playing games using computers.Debater2Jack >> [Debater 2- JACK]Textbooks should change into notebook computers. >> Textbooks should be replaced by notebook computers. Students can be very boring using the textbooks. >> Students are bored using textbooks. They will think what he/or she want to do because using textbook is boring. >> They can think what to do because textbook is boring. Also, using textbook can\'t memorize well. >> Also, we cannot memorize well by using textbooks. When we use online we can more improve than textbook. >> When we are on line, we can improve. We can improve listening, speak, word,grammar. >> We can improve listening, speaking, grammar and vocabulary skills. We can improve 4things at the same time. >> We can improve 4 things at the same time. [just the spacing my dear]I am a Jack. >> DO YOU MEAN: I go with Jack\'s opinion. Student\'s textboos should replaced by notebook computers. >> Student\'s textbooks should be replace by notebook computers.

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