Should the fashion industry use models that look more like regular people?

2021-10-26 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

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I think that they don\'t need to use models that look more like regular people. When I think about that why a company make advertisements, All of reasons are earning money. People are born with that being attracted people who has nice body. It isn\'t matter of sexual interest. When I went to shopping mall, I saw some mannequin to look like as regular people. It wasn\'t good. I didn\'t have a desire to buy.

강사 첨삭

Good evening [이름]ny! :)
Thank you for taking the time to answer our essay question. It was worthwhile to read it.
I\'m happy because you are vocal with your opinions. Please continue doing that. :)
See you in class later.
I hope you\'re having a great evening.
~Teacher Charry :)

I think that they don\'t need to use models that look more like regular people.
>> CORRECT!
When I think about that why a company make advertisements, All of reasons are earning money.
>> When I think of the reason why a company makes advertisements, it\'s all because of earning money.
People are born with that being attracted people who has nice body.
>> It\'s part of human nature to be attracted to people with nice bodies.
It isn\'t matter of sexual interest.
>> It isn\'t a matter of sexual interest.
When I went to shopping mall, I saw some mannequin to look like as regular people.
It wasn\'t good.
>> When I go to the shopping mall and see some mannequins looking like regular people, it doesn\'t look good.
I didn\'t have a desire to buy.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> I didn\'t have the desire to buy.

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