Should the media show graphic violence?
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I think that the media should show graphic violence, and parents should control their children.Life isn\'t full of beauty. Since we watch graphic violence, we can recognize about violence. Leaning violence indirectly is safer than leaning directly. It has also side effect, but if the media shows result of violence. There will be more gain than loss.
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Hello [이름]ny,
I think you make a very a good argument as to why violence should be shown in media. I agree that as long as it\'s done in a respectful way, we should try to be reflect the reality of life in the media, and that includes the bad and ugly parts like violence. I find your opinion about this topic very interesting.
Regards,
T. Angelica
I think that the media should show graphic violence, and parents should control their children.>> CORRECT
OR >> I think that the media should show graphic violence but parents should also control what their children watch.
Life isn\'t full of beauty.
>> CORRECT
Since we watch graphic violence, we can recognize about violence.
>> When we watch graphic violence, then we can learn to recognize the signs of violence
Leaning violence indirectly is safer than leaning directly.
>> Learning violence indirectly is safer than learning directly.
OR >> Learning violence indirectly is safer than experiencing it directly.
It has also side effect, but if the media shows result of violence. There will be more gain than loss.
>> It has side effects but if the media shows the results of violence, there will be more gains than loss.
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