Should there be any zoos in the world?
학생이 쓴 원문
Have you ever been to zoo? The problem about zoo\'s existences is very controversial now. I think zoos shouldn\'t be in the world.
First, zoos are stressful for animals. Many experts argue that zoos should be closed to preserve life.
Second, zoos are not good for children\'s education. Children need to be taught to respect life, but zoos are not helpful in educating children because they have the opposite purpose.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Hana! Thank you for this. I remember what my science teacher once said in our class. \" The best way to take care of animals and plants is to leave them in their natural habitat.\" I like that you express your own opinions assertively every time. See you!
-Teacher Anji
Have you ever been to zoo?
>> Have you ever been to a zoo?
The problem about zoo\'s existences is very controversial now.
>> The problem with zoo\'s existence is very controversial right now.
I think zoos shouldn\'t be in the world.
>> I think zoos shouldn\'t exist in the world.
First, zoos are stressful for animals.
First, zoos are stressful for animals.
>> CORRECT
Many experts argue that zoos should be closed to preserve life.
>> CORRECT
Second, zoos are not good for children\'s education.
Second, zoos are not good for children\'s education.
>> CORRECT
Children need to be taught to respect life, but zoos are not helpful in educating children because they have the opposite purpose.
>> CORRECT
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