Should voting be mandatory (compulsory)?
학생이 쓴 원문
Doing vote is necessary and important to improve national power.
If we make a rise a vote rate, Politician will compete other politician.
I believe that politicians competition will make a better our life.
On the other hand, If we didn\'t vote, almost politician will ignore people. At the result, they will not make a new law to improve our life.
The lastest president vote rate is 77%. That was a high record.
I think that 80% or more is the best. Vote is a chance to improve our country and meth to pressure to politician.
We need to use well this rule.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Jun!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. You really did well! :)
~ T. Camille
Doing vote is necessary and important to improve national power.
>> Voting is necessary and important to improve national power.
If we make a rise a vote rate, Politician will compete other politician.
>> If we raise the number of votes, politicians will compete with other politicians.
OR >> If we increase the number of votes, politicians will compete with other politicians.
I believe that politicians competition will make a better our life.
>> I believe that politicians\' competition will make future lives better.
On the other hand, if we didn\'t vote, almost politician will ignore people.
>> On the other hand, if we don\'t vote, most politicians will ignore people.
At the result, they will not make a new law to improve our life.
>> As a result, they will not make a new law to improve our lives.
The lastest president vote rate is 77%. That was a high record.
>> The latest president\'s vote rate is 77%. That was a high record.
I think that 80% or more is the best.
>> CORRECT!
Vote is a chance to improve our country and meth to pressure to politician.
>> Voting is a chance to improve our country and put pressure on politicians.
We need to use well this rule.
>> CORRECT!
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