should we preserve the traditions and practices during big holidays? Why or why not?

2025-06-12 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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About the topic “should we preserve and practice traditions or not” I believe there is both pros and cons. First, the positive aspects of it are that we can show respect to our ancestors and keep in touch with families. As we prepare ancestors rites, we can show them a respect. Also we can gather with family. Second, negative aspects of it are that people should spend too much time on preparing food and it can make them even more tired than normal working days. Since holidays are meant to have a rest, feeling more tired isn’t right. So I think we should keep balance between tradition and what is better now days.

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Thank you for this, [이름]! Keep them coming. Have a great day!

About the topic “should we preserve and practice traditions or not” I believe there is both pros and cons.
>>>> About the topic if we should preserve and practice traditions or not, I believe there are both pros and cons.
First, the positive aspects of it are that we can show respect to our ancestors and keep in touch with families. 
>>>> OR: First, the positive aspects of it include showing respect to our ancestors and keeping in touch with families. 
As we prepare ancestors rites, we can show them a respect. 
>>>> As we prepare the ancestral rites, we can show them respect. 
Also we can gather with family.
>>>> Also/In addition, we can gather with the family. 
Second, negative aspects of it are that people should spend too much time on preparing food and it can make them even more tired than normal working days. 
>>>> Second, the negative aspect of it is that people should spend too much time on preparing food and it can make them even more tired than normal working days. 
Since holidays are meant to have a rest, feeling more tired isn’t right.
>>>> correct
So I think we should keep balance between tradition and what is better now days.
>>>> So, I think we should keep a balance between tradition and what is better nowadays.

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