Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations?
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I think that wealthy nations have to share their wealth among poorer nations. Poor nations want to become rich nations. While they are trying to make money, nature will be destroyed. For example, many experts said, Amazon is a lung of the earth, but Brazil cuts woods to expand industrial area. To keep amazon is worthy for all creature on earth. If wealthy nations share money to Brazil, Brazil doesn\'t need to develop their country.
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Thank you for taking the time to write an essay.
I agree that wealthy nations should share a part of their wealth to very poor nations.
However, I don\'t think that alone would end the problem on poverty.
I think wealthier nations should share to poorer nations their economic strategies on how to become rich.
If the poorer nations have the means to do it, it is guaranteed that they would also become rich and won\'t need to receive financial assistance from richer countries.
Thank you for taking the time to write an essay.
I agree that wealthy nations should share a part of their wealth to very poor nations.
However, I don\'t think that alone would end the problem on poverty.
I think wealthier nations should share to poorer nations their economic strategies on how to become rich.
If the poorer nations have the means to do it, it is guaranteed that they would also become rich and won\'t need to receive financial assistance from richer countries.
Anyhow, that\'s just my opinion about it.
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~Teacher Charry
I hope you\'re doing great. See you again tomorrow. :)
~Teacher Charry
>> CORRECT!
Poor nations want to become rich nations.
>> CORRECT!
While they are trying to make money, nature will be destroyed.
>> While they are trying to make money, their natural resources will be depleted and their environment gets destroyed.
For example, many experts said, Amazon is a lung of the earth, but Brazil cuts woods to expand industrial area.
>> For example, many experts said that the Amazon is the lung of the Earth but Brazilians destroys the forest to expand their industrial areas.
To keep amazon is worthy for all creature on earth.
>> Preserving the Amazon is vital for all creatures on Earth.
If wealthy nations share money to Brazil, Brazil doesn\'t need to develop their country.
>> If wealthy nations share their wealth to Brazil, Brazilians don\'t need to destroy the Amazon forest to develop their country.
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