Should women be allowed to serve in the military?
학생이 쓴 원문
First of all, This is a very difficult issue in korea.
My opinion is yes. But not all women must serve in the military.
Our country is waring with north korea. Many other country know that Korea war was finished in 1953.
We just stop the war in 1953, Officailly we are still war with north korea.
So, our country needs a many army to defend from North korea and China.
But korean population was declining rapidly and naturally, Our soldiers was declining too.
So I think some women need to serve in the military.
But I think It\'s never not solved. Because we vote every 2years.
If government decide a some women must serve in the military at 2years,
Probably government will be defeat to other party next vote. So I think women never go to the military.
This topic is very difficult but It\'s help me study more. Really Thank you, I always excited during conversation with you.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Jun!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. You really did well! :)
~ T. Camille
First of all, This is a very difficult issue in korea.
>> First of all, this is a very serious issue in Korea.
My opinion is yes.
>> CORRECT!
But not all women must serve in the military.
>> CORRECT!
Our country is waring with north korea.
>> Our country is at war with North Korea.
Many other country know that Korea war was finished in 1953.
>> Many other countries know that the Korean War was finished in 1953.
We just stop the war in 1953, Officailly we are still war with north korea.
>> We just stopped the war in 1953, but officially, we are still at war with North Korea.
So, our country needs a many army to defend from North korea and China.
>> So, our country needs many men in the army to defend our country from North Korea and China.
But korean population was declining rapidly and naturally, Our soldiers was declining too.
>> But the Korean population is declining rapidly and naturally, so the number of soldiers is declining too.
So I think some women need to serve in the military.
>> CORRECT!
But I think It\'s never not solved. >> But I think it\'s never solved.
Because we vote every 2 years.
>> It\'s because we vote every 2 years.
If government decide a some women must serve in the military at 2years, probably government will be defeat to other party next vote.
>> If the government decides to encourage some women to serve in the military for 2 years, probably the government will be defeated against the other party on the next election.
So I think women never go to the military.
So I think that\'s the reason why women never go to the military.
This topic is very difficult but It\'s help me study more. Really Thank you, I always excited during conversation with you.
(No worries ~ I hope this helps in improving your English writing skills ^^ I am happy to read your answers whenever you share your ideas about the homework question. Keep it up! ^^ ~ T. Camille)
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