single or married
학생이 쓴 원문
My best friend got married in June this year.
She was the first person who got married around me.
It was strange and I can't belive that until now.
We talked on the phone very often because she has enough time after marriage.
She is a homemaker,it is really weird to me.
Just a year ago,she was so busy,and we couldn't meet and talk on the phone.
But now she is not busy anymore,she goes to the market and prepare the dinner for her husband.
I think she lives a totally different life,and it makes me strange.
At my work,there are many women cowokers,some of them got married and the others don't.
We sometimes talk about this matter.
Becoming wife is different and becoming mother is more different in women's lives.
I don't know these things yet,and I need to think more about that.
강사 첨삭
Hi there [이름]! I agree with you that motherhood is a tough job. It demands a lot of time and responsibility, too. You really need to be ready before venturing into the world of motherhood. __t.karen__
Here are my corrections for you:
My best friend got married in June this year.
>>Correct!
She was the first person who got married around me.
>>She was the first person around me who got married.
>>She was the first person closest to me who got married.
It was strange and I can't belive that until now.
>>Correct!
We talked on the phone very often because she has enough time after marriage.
>>We talked on the phone very often because she has enough time after her marriage.
She is a homemaker,it is really weird to me.
>>Correct!
Just a year ago,she was so busy,and we couldn't meet and talk on the phone.
>>Correct!
>>Just a year ago,she was so busy and we couldn't even meet and talk on the phone. -->Better
But now she is not busy anymore,she goes to the market and prepare the dinner for her husband.
>>But now she is not busy anymore. She goes to the market and prepares dinner for her husband.
I think she lives a totally different life,and it makes me strange.
>>I think she lives a totally different life,and it makes me feel strange.
At my work,there are many women cowokers,some of them got married and the others don't.
>>At my work,I have many women co-wokers. Some of them got married and the others don't.
We sometimes talk about this matter.
>>Correct!
Becoming wife is different and becoming mother is more different in women's lives.
>>Becoming wife is different and becoming a mother is more different in women's lives.
I don't know these things yet,and I need to think more about that.
>>Correct!
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