skin deep

2020-08-25 · 첨삭 강사 Jasper

학생이 쓴 원문

I think this sentence means the beauty of inside and outside. Feeling beautiful is just the appearance at the first. We have no choice to judge the first impression in a short time. But we shouldn`t think of the first impression as their everything. In some experiments, when a woman with full makeup and a woman with no makeup is shopping They observed how people treated them. Surprisingly, there was a huge difference. After seeing it, I try to make up a little bit when I go out Maybe, we aren`t free from lookism sadly.

강사 첨삭

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I think this sentence means the beauty of inside and outside.

>> CORRECT

Feeling beautiful is just the appearance at the first.

>> Feeling beautiful is just the appearance.

We have no choice to judge the first impression in a short time.

>> We have no rights to judge the person on first site.

But we shouldn`t think of the first impression as their everything.

>> We also shouldn\'t think that our first impression is everything about them.

In some experiments, when a woman with full makeup and a woman with no makeup is shopping

>> There was an experiment about two women with fully make up while the other has no make up in shopping.

They observed how people treated them.

>> CORRECT

Surprisingly, there was a huge difference.

>> CORRECT

After seeing it, I try to make up a little bit when I go out

>> .. I tried ..

Maybe, we aren`t free from lookism sadly.

>> CORRECT

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