Sky dyving

2020-01-14 · 첨삭 강사 Oneil

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I have not exprienced much interesting activities, so I want to try Sky dyving because I want to feel flying in the sky. Thus Sky dyving is a interesting activities for a person.

강사 첨삭

I think this is a dangerous sports dear! :) You are very brave. 

I have not exprienced much interesting activities, so I want to try Sky dyving because I want to feel flying in the sky.
>> I have not experienced many interesting activities, so I want to try Sky diving because I would like to feel how it feels to be flying in the sky.

Thus Sky dyving is a interesting activities for a person.
>> Thus Sky diving is an interesting activity for a person.

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