Slaves to gadgets.
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I totally agree with that people are becoming slaves to gadgets these days. When I go to somewhere where is far from home especially when I use public transportation. I must bring a charger to recharge my smart phone. I don\'t know how did I spend time when I was in a train before having a smart phone. And, When I see a person who doesn\'t watch a smart phone in a train, I curious that what he is thinking.
I love the latest IT devices. Right after having a new IT device, I am totally becoming a slave to the IT device. If the IT device has a scratch, It is so heart break. I desire to turn back the time before when my IT device doesn\'t have a scratch. If I made the scratch, I blame myself. Although it is no use.
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Hello Il [이름],
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Sincerely,
Teacher Annie (^^)
I totally agree with that people are becoming slaves to gadgets these days.
>>> I totally agree with the statement that people are becoming slaves to gadgets these days.
When I go to somewhere where is far from home especially when I use public transportation. I must bring a charger to recharge my smart phone.
>>> When I go somewhere especially far from home or when I use public transportation, I must bring a charger to recharge my smartphone.
I don\'t know how did I spend time when I was in a train before having a smart phone.
>>> I don\'t know how did I spend time when I was on a train before when I still don\'t have a smartphone.
And, When I see a person who doesn\'t watch a smart phone in a train, I curious that what he is thinking.
>>> When I see a person who doesn\'t watch his /his smartphone on a train, I am curious as to that what he is thinking.
I love the latest IT devices. Right after having a new IT device, I am totally becoming a slave to the IT device.
>>> CORRECT
If the IT device has a scratch, It is so heart break.
>>> If the IT device has a scratch, It is so heartbreaking.
I desire to turn back the time before when my IT device doesn\'t have a scratch.
>>> CORRECT
If I made the scratch, I blame myself. Although it is no use.
>>> If I made the scratch, I usually blame myself. Although it is of no use.
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